What do you think of my first ever Harrisham Rhyme Poem?

Harrisham Rhyme Harrisham Rhyme, created by the female poet, Harrisham Minhas, belonging to the State of Punjab in India, of a six-line rhyming stanza. In this form, the last alphabet of the first word of each line is the first alphabet of the first word of next line. There is no restriction on the starting... show more Harrisham Rhyme
Harrisham Rhyme, created by the female poet, Harrisham Minhas, belonging to the State of Punjab
in India, of a six-line rhyming stanza. In this form, the last alphabet of the first word of each line is the
first alphabet of the first word of next line.

There is no restriction on the starting alphabet of the first line.

Rhyming scheme : ababab.




Wrist watch worn warrantee expired,
In ones death, ones work is mired,
In ones life, ones work aspired,
Growing old we become retired,
Wear our last suit which is required,
Dressed in black, our farewell attired.
Update: Example:
Poetry

Rhythmic patterns encapsulating what I feel,
cascade in words which comfort my soul,
embossing the experiences that appeal,
generated in phrases with firm control,
delightful lines upshot with zeal,
leading my muse to a further stroll.

Copyright © 2007 Harrisham Minhas
Update 2: ok, mine is aaaaaa.
So It's not a Harrisham Rhyme Poem.
oh well. try again. so what do you think of my P.O.E.M! : )
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