Anonymous
Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 5 months ago

do you like my poem? (see details)?

If only I could dream forever

You and I could live together

I can’t stay long, I have to go

I love you more, I hope you know

I hate this place, “reality”

Seven days, just one for me

What’s so hard for them to see

That all we want is to be free

Home at last, now fast a sleep

She tossed me a journal that she’d keep

She has adventures, she does some chores

Sometimes just waits by the door

Why can’t it be just me and her

Just me and her

And nothing more

Update:

it's about my fantasy dragon wife ^~^

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  • 5 months ago

    Lol....................... ....

  • 5 months ago

    it's good but honestly, you need to try more okay?

  • 5 months ago

    I think it’s quite decent... ignore the rude people commenting

  • Joe
    Lv 5
    5 months ago

    You could do better. Read a lot and write a lot. It takes work work work to write good poetry. I like that you're trying, most people don't even try.

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  • 5 months ago

    It's a bit generic. It has rhythm and lilt, but needs more concrete words.

  • Anonymous
    5 months ago

    Its a true one you know

    And a a lost cause

    Life of a shorties

    A space of yourself demise

    Some say good:

    but I say:

    Say nothing

  • 5 months ago

    I love you more are phony lines

  • 5 months ago

    I like it. It's not pretentious and doesn't try to be too ambitious.

  • Anonymous
    5 months ago

    It’s not very good to be honest.

  • 5 months ago

    Don’t quit your day job, your poem made me blood fart.

    • Jacqueline5 months agoReport

      How very rude
      You know that dude
      Now I can't eat
      The rest of my food
      Way to mess up
      A decent mood
      Don't like it? Fine!
      Why be so crude?

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