Can u guys review my poem?

i feel like yahoo is the only place where you can get honest, critical reviews on your writing so i made an account. i mean, strangers can be more honest than the people you know right? since there is no consequence n' stuff. anywho, here goes nothing: my eyeballs move, slowly, towards the right of my... show more i feel like yahoo is the only place where you can get honest, critical reviews on your writing so i made an account. i mean, strangers can be more honest than the people you know right? since there is no consequence n' stuff.
anywho, here goes nothing:

my eyeballs move,
slowly,
towards the right of my forehead,
my mind, it likes to wander
away and away,
like a michevious peter pan
on a short trip
from his magical wonderland

there,
its that tall lithe cat on a high brick wall,
down below,
murder and evil and the french revolutoin is thick in the air,
the fancy guillotine takes a head,
long live the queen!


my mind,
its an old philosopher,
it cries," eureka! eureka! i have found it.
the meaning to life, finally in my hand,"
scrambling and embrassing,
naked through the streets
politics and religion and what not,
threads through it's fingers,
this sneaky devil,
always where it shouldn't be

my mind,
it is undressing you right now
it wonders,
about the twitch in your skin,
the tilt of your chin,
what are you hiding?
this fool,
it always wonders


what can i say?
i am but a humble, lonely figure
in some crevice of this high mighty cathedral abode
good and evil co exist here,
they rub shoulders and
legendary battles erupt like volcanoes.
it leaves me breathless,
it leaves me hurting.

blame me not!
blame me not!
i am but a collateral damage
of this no man-land.
i fear, i might just go mad
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