How to improve this sentence ?
I wrote a sentence as:
The average salary of the male group is 20k, significantly lower than 30k of the female group.
But I feel this sentence does not sound right because the of preposition is wrong here. Can you help me make a better sentence?
I changed this to:
The average salary of the male group is $20,000, significantly lower than that of the female group ($30,000).
But I still don't feel happy with this sentence, because I want to put $30,000 somewhere in the sentence rather than hiding it in the brackets.
- JOHNLv 711 months ago
The average salary of the male group is 20k, significantly lower than the 30k of the female group.
- 11 months ago
The average salary of the male group is $20,000, which is 33% lower than the $30,000 average salary of the female group.
The female group showed an average salary of $30,000, a 50% increase over the male group's average salary of $20,000.
Playing with numbers can say the same thing but give a much more impactful impression. Don't decide for the reader what is significant, let them have their own opinion. But a 50% increase sounds much different than a 33% reduction, even though the numbers are the same.
- Lapiz DominoesLv 711 months ago
`k` commonly refers to money.
It would be correct to write, "Thousand", or "thousand" - Your choice.