How to improve this comparative sentence?

I am trying to write a sentence like this below, but neither of them looks great. The second one had a number enclosed in brackets, but I don't really like that. So the question is: how to remove the brackets in the second one?

The volatility of emerging countries (17.1%) was modestly higher than that of developed countries (13.0%).The volatility of emerging countries was 17.1%, modestly higher than that of developed countries (13.0%).

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  • 4 weeks ago
    Best answer

    The volatility of emerging countries was 17.1%, modestly higher than that of developed countries at 13.0%

    • Bill Jiang4 weeks agoReport

      This is really a great writing! Many thanks, Mark. I really found it useful.

  • 4 weeks ago

    No thanks bro grammar

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