What do you think of this poem called "Blind Eyes?"?
Rode the tide until it took me
It washed my body whole
The eyes couldn't see
I had everywhere to go
The waves told me to be
Free as a skeleton, so
The blood of the sea
Only death, I know
- Anonymous10 months agoFavourite answer
It's written by a teenager who's never read any poetry.
- 5 months ago
Great write. "The eyes couldn't see" is a cliche'd line. You can find a more delicious idea to plant there or delete the line all together.
Consider "where the waves told me to be".Satisfying read.
- PearlLv 710 months ago
i think its a good poem
- MaryLv 710 months ago
Lacks structure, form, meter, and anything other than the basic rudiments of a rhyme scheme.
It’s words written down by someone who doesn’t understand what separates a poem from words thrown on a page.
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- Man AbrierLv 510 months ago
Sounds like something written by an angsty goth girl in high school who listens to My Chemical Romance