What do you think of this poem called "Blind Eyes?"?

Rode the tide until it took me

It washed my body whole

The eyes couldn't see

I had everywhere to go

The waves told me to be

Free as a skeleton, so

The blood of the sea

Only death, I know

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  • Anonymous
    10 months ago
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    It's written by a teenager who's never read any poetry.

  • 5 months ago

    Great write. "The eyes couldn't see" is a cliche'd line. You can find a more delicious idea to plant there or delete the line all together.  

    Consider "where the waves told me to be".Satisfying read.

  • Pearl
    Lv 7
    10 months ago

    i think its a good poem

  • Mary
    Lv 7
    10 months ago

    Lacks structure, form, meter, and anything other than the basic rudiments of a rhyme scheme. 

    It’s words written down by someone who doesn’t understand what separates a poem from words thrown on a page.

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  • 10 months ago

    Sounds like something written by an angsty goth girl in high school who listens to My Chemical Romance

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