melody asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 8 months ago

Does my poem have potential?

Can’t break out of my cloak of. Lies,

Can’t breathe, only choke, Green skies

In the water, to drown, seems a lullaby

Can’t seem to see anything anymore, Only green skies 

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  • 8 months ago
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    I think you can post on Instagram and see if you have readers that like it.

    It can be good, and you can include some description of what you are talking about in your posts 

  • Lôn
    Lv 7
    8 months ago

    Potential to be binned!!!.... you are, never have been and never will be a poet Mildred... please stop posting this rubbish over and over and over and over.

  • 8 months ago

    Potential for what? One note: Get rid of the period after "of", and end that line with "lies".

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