Anonymous
Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 month ago

Seeking constructive feedback on protest poem?

This is a protest poem I began writing in 2019 about racism, bigotry, and corruption. I recently revised it since the murder George Floyd took place. I’ve learned a lot more recently about police corruption and brutality. I am seeking any constructive criticism or feedback. I want to know if I can improve this more. Thank you.

See the tumblr link below:

https://cutetabaxibard.tumblr.com/post/62251342729...

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  • Ludwig
    Lv 6
    4 weeks ago

    I will be honest - not good.   It doesn't have any feeling of maturity or thought to it,  reminds me of the KONY2012 children's campaign.   Or 'extinction rebellion'.

  • 1 month ago

    Wow. That was really bad. I'm afraid it can't be improved. These things happen. Hope this helped!

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