Is a story like this romantic?
A girl who never had no one, who is orphan and poor falls in love with a guy who was at war and never smiles or wants to talk. Yet with her he acts protective and caring and is always worried about her, but he never manages to express his feelings to her. She thinks he doesn't want her and starts getting sick. One day she is thrown in a river by some enemies and he saves her and takes care of her. Then she is shot and he rescues her again though the doctor didn't want to visit her at all as she wad not from that country. Then he is imprisoned and flees but he is injured, the girl makes a long journey to bring his friends to save him, when she finally manages to she starts crying for all that she went through and for his love, that she feels she will never have. He tells her he does love her and she cries in his arms after a long time where she lived without love or human affection.
- bluebellbkkLv 72 months ago
No, it is not romantic. It is poorly-written garbage.
- PrinceLv 62 months ago
Yes it is very romantic. Dreadful backstory and one feels terribly sorry for the characters. But yes it is very romantic.
- TinaLv 72 months ago
Do, please stop this. Your story gets sillier every time you outline it.
- CogitoLv 72 months ago
If you mean you're planning on writing it as a full novel, first spend a few years learning better English. ('Never had no-one' is appalling!"
Then spend a few more years reading really good literature and learning how to tell a story.
Then think of a realistic plot which isn't cliche and patronising towards girls.
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- 2 months ago
Try it if interested in wooing female fans .
But Why not try some scientific sky-fi or a cartoon series instaed !
... - atleast may get kid's audience !!
- Anonymous2 months ago
Why do you require an audience for this wankfest? Is it just not enough for you without imagining us cringing?
- 2 months ago
I feel like there is too many "savior" events here. One event is fine. But it gets to be repetitive and less meaningful in my opinion. Less is more in some circumstances and you risk being too cliche in instances.Maybe take a different approach. What if she saves him instead of him saving her? Think outside the box. Writing is all about feeling. Make yourself feel something and you strengthen the chances of making others feel something too. Good luck!
- Anonymous2 months ago
Clearly this is a thing for you. Leave us alone and write it. Obviously you want to.
It's pretty clear to those of us who have wearied of your endless questions about this kind of plot that you don't have a clue what romance is nor do you have market-ready writing skills.
It's only romantic if you make a certain kind of reader care deeply about these people. That takes a skill you'll never acquire until you actually attempt to write the damned story.
- MarliLv 72 months ago
When you have finally written it and uploaded or self-published it, the sales and reviews will tell you if you have written a worthwhile romantic novel or an implausible series of events that a reader cannot believe.
It's your job to write it. It's your job to persuade the reader that the story is believable.
Why does she expect him to intuit her thoughts and desires? Why does he not speak to her? It's all over chivalrous to hang around to rescue her but driving her mad by his mixed signals is not a sensible form of caring and loving.
Update: When he saves her from drowning, don't have him strip her naked. Have him rub her arms and legs and get her quickly to a place where there are blankets, towels and clothing.
And if he does strip her, remember that girls and women wear underwear. You keep forgetting that little detail in every version of that scene.
And please keep her awake. If you think an erotic undressing scene is romantic and necessary, have him coax her to it and have her agree. Feasting his eyes on her naked unconscious body is 1) lewd; 2) an invasion of privacy as well as of her modesty; 3) akin to rape (or violation at the least). Women don't like those scenes, and l hope that most men despise a "peeping Tom." If she must be unconscious when he probes for shards of glass, at least have him immediately drape her private parts under a blanket or sheet.
- ElaineLv 72 months ago
Is this another iteration of the girl saving the POW? Enough already with this crap. Just shoot the pair and save them and us from misery.