What do you think about the poem "Redemption?"?


Apples fall to gravity,

And hit humanity. Which

Came first and fell last?

Seek the reddest apple,

For its labor of beauty.

The One prized Above!

Who can reach the sun,

During the darkest night?

In a time of sticks and stones,

Krishna reveals warnings,

The signs in Kali Yuga.

If your ears hear salvation,

The Golden Age comes

And lights the wretched

State of naked beings. 

Bright fire of eternity!  

From these flames to ashes,

Another apple tree grows,

For the hungry thinker.

Apples fall to gravity.

The Golden Age comes

And lights the wretched

State of naked beings.

Bright fire of eternity!

3 Answers

  • 2 months ago

    I don't like the title, but I do like the imagery, meaning, rhyme scheme, and plot consistency. 8.5/10

  • Anonymous
    2 months ago

    Even to this of thoughts; God will put an end to the just live by faith. For in the light darkness has its root.

    I will rejoice over Jerusalem and take delight in my people; the sound of weeping and of crying will be heard in it no more. Isaiah 65:19

  • 2 months ago

    A. I see nothing redemptive

    B. it has the pattern of rap lyrics, not so much poetry, Rhymming is secondary in poetry to the language oand the meaning...your rap is a lot of words say little more "than it sucks to be you pal"

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